Asttle Narrative Writing - The day a Wizard, Ghost and a dragon became friends.

Teacher Note - ‘UNASSISTED’ ASTTLE WRITING

The children write for a total of 40 minutes. Within that timeframe they have to plan their writing (a brainstorm) write, edit and re-craft their work. They are not allowed to use dictionaries or word cards. The students completed their writing on paper but have typed it out for their blogs.

WALT write a creative narrative story!

23.11.21

Once upon a time their was a very kind ghost that liked to trick people by whispering in their ears. One day he scared a baby and whispered in his ear ' Thanks for the lollipop ' and the little baby screamed so loud that the ghost back to his cave. But nobody knew that there was a wizard lurking beneath the cave with the powerful but lazy fire breathing dragon, and the dragon did not like to be woken up. The wizard was tired of having to be lurking in the shadows, so he woke up the dragon and put a random spell on him and by the time the dragon got back the whole town was...... DESTROYED!!!                                                                    

The ghost was watching the dragon and he followed the dragon back to his layer and he decided he would talk to him. So he floated in and the wizard noticed him and shouted WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE? The ghost was shocked he answered I came to ask why you burned the town down sir, what do you mean? The wizard asked, come and have a look replied the ghost in two seconds he heard a low cry and the wizard said I am so sorry I will do anything to repay the damage I have caused. Soon after the ghost answered Well we could use some help rebuilding the town. Two weeks later the town was rebuilt and the wizard and the can't forget about the dragon they were all friends.

Thank-you Whaea Seroya

 

My Persuasive Writing Plan

 WALT plan our persuasive writing on a JAM board.

My Lockdown Bubble

WALT share details about our ‘Lockdown Bubble’.

First Draft - Mahuika Show

 We are writing about our experience at the Mahuika Show. 

Once upon a time there were two girls called Sissy and Kahu. Kahu was trying to find Sissy because Sissy was hiding she was hiding because she didn't want to do any jobs. Nana had called Sissy and Kahu to come and help her with her jobs. But Kahu was complaining because Sissy never does her jobs. Nana left to do her jobs she left Sissy and Kahu alone Nana told Kahu to keep an eye on Sissy. Kahu had found a magic kete and had a look inside Sissy wanted to touch it but than the kete growled and Kahu dropped it Kahu tried to pick it up Sissy had grabbed the magic sticks from the kete and she accidentally made a fire Nana ran to help and stopped the fire but than she froze.Than WHAM Potiki the last remaining of Mahuika 's sons jumped out of the kete. 

 He explained that if they don't hurry and find Mahuikas mum than their Nana will turn to a piece of coal.Potiki takes Sissy and Kahu to the underworld to find Potiki's mum Mahuika before Nana turns to a piece of  coal. On the way Pukeko the angry giant bird kidnaps Potiki so Mahuika would stop the curse that she put on him. His beak is the only thing  that ever hurt his beak always was burning red hot like flames. The girls go searching for Potiki so they can save potiki and Nan. 

On the way they find a Manutukutuku, Sissy uses it to find where pukeko lives and than she finds out that she should have used it to go to the place where pukeko was right than. On the path Sissy went, she found piwakawaka. Sissy helped him and then goes on Sissy and Kahu meet once again.They meet Te Ra, Te Ra called Kahu bossy and calls Sissy Maui girl. Te Ra has two friends that serve him. Te Ra gives Sissy a riddle and he zips kahu 's mouth. Sissy has three guesses she has to get it right otherwise they won't be able to save Potiki or Nan. By surprise  she got the other guesses wrong she said are you a horse but Te Ra said NO, ooh ooh said Sissy are you a road NO said Te Ra she had one more guess and she did get it right Te Ra looked actually kind of sad but Sissy crossed it anyway. Pukeko at the same time was trying to make Potiki call his mother Mahuika. Pukeko said he had two gifts for Mahuika in exchange to lift his curse. When they went back to Nan and they were very relieved that she wasn't turned to a piece of coal.

Final Draft - Descriptive Writing - My Mum

WALT to write a description of our mum using precise words to create an image in our readers minds.

I am going to introduce you to someone special…

My Mum’s name is Erina she is kind , supportive and a loyal role model. 

She wears red and purplish glasses, she has night sky brown hair , freckles like me , brown glittering eyes and she always wears black pants and a tidy bun on top of her head when she goes to work. Whenever she is going to a party she always wears her pretty dresses.

This is what she does and does not do ...

She likes doing exercise , drinking smoothies , doing jobs and cooking dinner. My mum loves plants she has them all over the house because she is a crazy plant lady. She loves to watch New Amsterdam on Netflix. My Mum works at blessings for life so she looks after kids all day and night.

What we like to do together, why my mum is the best mum ever

I like it when we have ice cream together even milo's too. I love it when we have biscuits do baking, and fold the clothes. I love it when she makes stuff for us like our silver money boxes. My mum is always there for us that is why she is the BEST MUM EVER.

ANZAC Day

 On ANZAC Day we celebrate to honour the soldiers that fought for us in the war. Some celebrate by having a dawn parade . We call it a dawn parade because that is when the soldiers landed on Gallipoli on the 25th of April 1915. We wear poppies and some people might wear their whanaus medals that they won when they were fighting. Poppies are special because they were the first flowers to grow on Gallipoli after the war. We go to memorials and sing , say prayers, say the ode and listen to the last post. At the memorials we lay wreaths on the stones and everybody lays their poppies on them. Veterans are old soldiers that fought in the war and survived. Veterans wear their medals proudly. They celebrate by marching at dawn parades. Some people might cry becuase of all the soldiers that died for us. There might even be whanau who died.

                                          Lest We Forget 

                                                     

The Great Reading Adventure

 We are learning to write a moment in time about our class assembly, 'The Great Reading Adventure'.

The great reading adventure

I think my tummy is going to explode. This is the day it has finally arrived the great reading adventure. I had heaps of parts being Scruffy I didn’t think I’d remember my parts. I was a bit shy when the parents were coming in.  When it was my turn I was a bit shy but I did it anyway. I didn’t think I was brave enough. When I saw my mum I actually wanted to go hug her  because that night I was going to cry because my sister didn’t want to watch my assembly. So I was actually going to burst out with tears.  My brother is duffy[Kylan in the assembly most of my parts are in the first scene my first part is this ‘Duffy! Duffy! Duffy! Duffy!!!’ While walking up the walkway I have sixteen parts and the assembly is  too long. Scene 1. scene 2. is the wonkey donkey 3. Bfg 4.Non-fiction5. Maui and the sun. My next part is ‘why are you reading’ then‘I don't want to read reading is soooooooooooooooooooooooo boring’.  Then Friend 1 [Tame says what what what??? Boring!!!! It's not boring!!! Scruffy[Me Oh I think it is!!’ Then Levi friend 2 says Duffy sort your sister out.  Alaris friend 3 you just need to find a book you love. Come on, well help you. Duffy[Kylan Scruffy we have heaps of books at school. There are all sorts of books to choose from one of them will be just right for you!! Scruffy[Me immmmm okay if you say so.Duffy[Kylan okay Scruffy I am going to take you on the reading adventure!!!  

Tsunami Evacuation

 We wrote a recount about our evacuation experience. WALT add details to our writing and edit carefully.

08/03/2021

On Friday a week ago right when we were doing our free writing Friday, Whaea Deb told us to go get our bags and shoes. No one got their hats except for Carly Kylan and Ryan. I felt like my heart was beating so fast. When we had gone across the road we went through a gate and walked up a steep hill. When we got up the hill we had stopped for some morning tea. Then   about a quarter of the school had gotten picked up so we kept on going. And we got all the way up the hill and then that's right when my dad comes and picks me and my sister up so I had to run all the way back down again. And my sister. When we got in the van my belt was stuck behind the door so I had to open up the door but not fall out because it was a matter of life and death. When we got home Nova was begging my dad to ring mum so he finally rang her because he was sick of her whining. When my dad rang my mum my sister stole my dad's phone then one of my dad's friends came over. I was worried when I heard the car noise because I thought that it was a huge giant wave but then I realised that it was just a car. At my nan's on okahu road where my mum was with her 27 children, Kalanio and the screaming baby Mikasa she always has big  tantrums. When my brother was at school my dad had come in and got Kalani’s bag so he signed off Kalani and he zoomed off in their van so Kalani finished eating. The bridge was surged  up so my dad didn’t want to risk it. I was sad that I didn’t get a sausage sizzle but at least I was safe at home with my sister and dad. I hope everyone else was okay too.  

Tractor Trek Big feelings

Last Friday we had a Tractor Trek I saw people were trying to drive the tractors too.I climbed on the tyres, on the biggest left red one.I heard heaps of children yelling with excitement up there.

Big feelings korero        

In the whare a lady called Cat was talking  about big feelings. Each person has heaps of feelings, some people have mad feelings some have sad some people are always happy. You    anxious annoyed and rejected like Cat was when she was little because they moved of  the farm. She thought  her mum was too busy new baby and her dad wasn't coming over to pick her up because they didn't live on the farm any more. In the hall Tame, Charlie and Millan volunteered to be a bit embarrassed It was so funny!!!  Tame wore  a skeleton suit ,Charlie wore a mood  mask and Millan wore some funny glasses.